IELTS Writing Band 9 Essays A guide to writing high quality IELTS Band 9 essays with 40 sample essays and notes. 2nd edition [Dumbo]

In the initial stages of a country’s development, providing technology is an ineffective way of developing a country as widespread use of technology is expensive and unaffordable. It is only as a country develops through education and begins to become wealthier that technology becomes available to many people. In summary, a country’s political and legal systems are the most critical factors in ensuring that it can develop. Once these are in place, money is much more likely to be spent on education which can help countries to improve. As a country develops and becomes wealthier, it will gradually be able to access better technology. Essay Notes This essay is challenging because it will be unfamiliar to most students and requires an understanding of factors that prevent or allow countries to develop. As is often the case, IELTS examiners do not want to provide students with too much information or provide students with examples in the question that are secondary ideas rather than the critical idea. Very often students focus on the specific examples in the question rather than the more general underlying question. In this case the question is not about the role of education or technology in developing a country – it is what factors are critical for a country’s development? The answer to that question is that they require good political and legal frameworks, which in turn lead to a fairer society and ensure that resources go to the right places. Few students will recognize that this is the key idea required to write a very high quality response to the question. Those that do and can communicate the idea effectively will score highly on this question.

The opening sentence of the essay covers the key topic, which is how to improve the quality of developing countries. The focus of this essay is the idea that countries can only develop when they have adequate political and legal systems and is listed as the first idea in the first of two ideas sentences. The second ideas sentence suggests that education and technology can improve the quality of people’s lives in developing countries, but this will only occur if a satisfactory political and legal framework is in place. The introduction concludes with the aim of the essay, which is to describe methods of assisting countries that are developing. The opening body paragraph covers the critical point of the essay, which is that without a strong legal and political framework countries invariably have significant amounts of corruption and this prevents resources being directed towards critical programs. Examples of countries where this is an issue are also provided. The main point is further supported by the idea that where countries have corrupt leaders this hinders effective foreign aid. It is the key idea in this paragraph that makes this essay very strong. The second body paragraph begins to deal with the issues raised in the question and focuses on education. The essay states that education can only become an effective tool if there is a stable political environment. However, it states that if such conditions are met, then education is an effective method of developing a country as it leads to improved methods of producing goods. The importance of education is further supported with the idea that it improves people’s understanding of other people and the world. The final body paragraph deals with the suggestion in the question that technology may be critical in developing a country. This paragraph is short because only a single idea is presented which is that the cost of technology is too great for countries in the earliest stages of development and only becomes a viable option as a country has already begun to develop. The conclusion simply restates the three key ideas of the essay and includes a sentence for each. Essay Vocabulary Assisting – Assisting is a more formal equivalent of helping.

Unaccountable – In Western society it is expected that people in positions of authority are answerable to those who they represent. A person in authority who does not have to consider the feelings or needs of others is said to be unaccountable. Widespread – Widespread is a more formal alternative from common. Ineffective – A plan or action is ineffective when it fails to produce the results that were hoped for. -- END –

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